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RetroLounge Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Sep-02-06 12:31 AM
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The RetroLounge Daily Poem Thread (Sat 9/2/06)
The Thief

What is it when your man sits on the floor
in sweatpants, his latest project
set out in front of him like a small world, maps
and photographs, diagrams and plans, everything
he hopes to build, invent or create,
and you believe in him as you always have,
even after you set your coffee down
and move toward him, to where he sits
oblivious of you, concentrating
in a square of sun --
you step over the rulers and blue graph-paper
to squat behind him, and he barely notices,
though you're still in your robe
which falls open a little as you reach
around his chest, feel for the pink
wheel of each nipple, the slow beat
of his heart, your ear pressed to his back
to listen -- and you are torn,
not wanting to interrupt his work
but unable to keep your fingers
from dipping into the ditch in his pants,
torn again with tenderness
to the way his flesh grows unwillingly
toward your curved palm, toward the light,
as if you planted it, this sweet root,
your mouth already an echo of its shape --
you slip your tongue in his ear
and he hears you call him away
from his work, the angled lines of his thoughts,
into the shapeless place you are bound
to take him, over the bridges of bone, beyond
borders of skin, climbing over him
into the world of the body, its labyrinth
of ladders and stairs -- and you love him,
with equal measures of expectancy
and fear and awe, taking him with you
into the soft geometry of the flesh, the earth
before its sidewalks and cities,
its glistening spires,
stealing him back from the world he loves
into this other world he cannot build without you.

Dorianne Laux

*******************

RL

If you have a request for a certain Poet, post their name in the thread and I will find a poem by them and post it...

if you want to see some of my poetry, see the blog at:
http://www.myspace.com/retropaul
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RevCheesehead Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Sep-02-06 12:35 AM
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1. Ooo.....Oooo.....Oooo.....
Oostburg!!! :rofl:


OK, you got my attention. Now what? :evilgrin:
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RetroLounge Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Sep-02-06 12:35 AM
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2. You just like seeing the word nipple in a poem
:hi:

RL
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RevCheesehead Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Sep-02-06 12:39 AM
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7. No, that wasn't it.
It was the "ditch in the pants" that got me. :blush:
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RetroLounge Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Sep-02-06 12:42 AM
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8. ...
but unable to keep your fingers
from dipping into the ditch in his pants,
torn again with tenderness
to the way his flesh grows unwillingly
toward your curved palm, toward the light,
as if you planted it, this sweet root,
your mouth already an echo of its shape --


:hot:

RL
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RevCheesehead Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Sep-02-06 12:43 AM
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9. *sizzle*
:loveya:












what? I just love that word! :7
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yvr girl Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Sep-02-06 12:36 AM
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3. There are ways to get a man's attention
I think this method would work, no matter how engrossing the project. As Paris would say, "That's Hot!"
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RetroLounge Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Sep-02-06 12:37 AM
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4. This whole scene seems familiar somehow...
:shrug:

RL
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yvr girl Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Sep-02-06 12:38 AM
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6. Don't make me spank you...
again
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RetroLounge Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Sep-02-06 11:07 AM
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16. Please Mistress yvr
may I have another?

RL
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SeattleGirl Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Sep-02-06 12:38 AM
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5. That's often worked for me......
:evilgrin:
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RetroLounge Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Sep-02-06 12:43 AM
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10. Which part?
:hi:

RL
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idgiehkt Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Sep-02-06 12:44 AM
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11. putting aside the subject matter
that woman is so talented. wow. it's just beautiful, there aren't any awkward spots. what command of the language. i'm jealous as hell.
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RetroLounge Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Sep-02-06 08:59 AM
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13. Yeah, she and Kim Addonizio have become
my favorite contemporary poets.

:hi:

RL
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Sep-02-06 12:50 AM
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12. Omigod, my dear Retro.........
Hot hardly describes this.......

How erotic this work is........

Really paints quite a vivid picture........

Truly beautiful as well.........

...and you love him,
with equal measures of expectancy
and fear and awe...


Just wonderful.........

Thank you so much, sweetie........

Getting an early start, huh?

:hug:
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RetroLounge Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Sep-02-06 09:51 AM
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14. Early Start or a Late Finish...
Depends how you look at it...

:hi:

RL
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wildhorses Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Sep-02-06 10:11 AM
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15. ..........
stealing him back from the world he loves
into this other world he cannot build without you.


guess we get jealous sometimes:shrug:
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RetroLounge Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Sep-02-06 11:14 AM
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17. ...
:hi:

RL
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wildhorses Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Sep-02-06 11:33 AM
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18. how are ya? good to see you.
Edited on Sat Sep-02-06 11:34 AM by wildhorses
:hi:




edited cos godd is NOT good:P
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RetroLounge Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Sep-02-06 11:35 AM
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19. "godd is NOT good"
:rofl:

I am doing well, thanks. How about you?

:hug:

RL
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wildhorses Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Sep-02-06 11:40 AM
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20. well, not when I spell it that way...heehee
I am trying to be productive and post here, too. Multi-tasking I think they call it. Have a load in the washer and a load in the dryer. Dishwasher is running and the bills are opened and the checkbook is out....UGH!! same old boring stuff

:hug:

wh
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RetroLounge Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Sep-02-06 11:42 AM
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21. Just got done updating 2 checking accounts
and a savings account.

Paying bills over phone.

Feeding kids.

Cleaning the apartment.

Productive and Posting = Multi-tasking...

:hi:

RL
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swimboy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Sep-02-06 11:45 AM
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22. Let's hear it for men's nipples!
Happy Saturday, RL!

Great poem today! :thumbsup:
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RetroLounge Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Sep-02-06 11:57 AM
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23. Just for you my friend!


:hi:

RL
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RetroLounge Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Sep-02-06 04:12 PM
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24. kick
:kick:

RL
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