Help me flush out this sentence.

[Grins]

Like you I am getting those Reich-wing emails bitching about everything, glorifying the orange howler monkey, and changing the subject. One came today on which I screamed "Bullshit!" because I respond to all of them. I reminded them this was just a diversion from the real news. Below is the concluding sentence I wrote. If you have a moment, could you let me know how I could improve on it? (Keep it a single sentence.)


this is just a diversion from the every-day-revealing fact that Donald Trump, his associates and appointees, the entire senior leadership of the Republican Party and its third party foundations and associates, deliberately colluded with a hostile foreign government to subvert the United States in national and world affairs, and did it for money and/or power.

[jberryhill]

1. ...and are doing everything they can to block investigations of it.

[Leith]

3. There You Have It

Let's hope that Grins' readers read the whole thing. Their eyes very well could glaze over before they get half way through it.

[Squinch]

2. I think that is excellent, but I also think the meme floating around today should be added to

everything we say: There are only two kinds of Republicans: billionaires and suckers.

[Bernardo de La Paz]

4. You mean "flesh out".

Change it to:

This is just a diversion from the facts, revealed every day, that Trump, his associates, appointees, and the entire leadership of the Republican Party deliberately colluded with a hostile foreign government to subvert the United States in national and world affairs, and did it for money and power.

Compare it word for word with yours. In particular a few word were dropped to increase the potency and directness.

* Initial capital on sentences
* "every-day-revealing fact" is very awkward wording. The facts are being revealed. The facts are not doing the revealing.
* Drop the "third party foundations and associates". It doesn't add anything so therefore it is excessive verbiage that gets in the way.
* Change the and/or to a simple "and". They (collectively) did it for both, though individuals might have done it for one or the other or both.
* "his associates and appointees": try to avoid "and" in the middle of lists because it makes the reader stumble until they figure out that the list has not yet ended.
* Dropping "Donald" is a question of style; I favor brevity whenever possible since briefer is usually more potent.

[Grins]

5. Flesh!!! Yes!

Fingers faster than brain. My only excuse.

Thanks for the tips.