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mainer

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10. What's wrong with "she said", and making the dialogue do the work?

Reply to Justice wanted (Original post)

Mon Apr 16, 2012, 06:52 PM

Apr 2012

Just an editorial comment from someone who does this for a living.

"Her chestnut brown eyes rolled upward", is unnecessary if you can convey that through her words.

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Am I being too hard on myself or should I give up completely? [View all] Justice wanted Mar 2012 OP

Ignore your so-called friend, and keep writing DavidDvorkin Mar 2012 #1

Never give up if it's your dream! Fearless Mar 2012 #2

Forget about grammar and spelling and just write, write, and write some more. HopeHoops Mar 2012 #3

Thank you for your thoughts and words and suggestions. Justice wanted Mar 2012 #4

Editing is not writing. Neoma Mar 2012 #5

What you have is intriguing already MorningGlow Mar 2012 #6

Do what everyone else before this has said. beyurslf Mar 2012 #7

You are being too hard on yourself. bemildred Mar 2012 #8

Writing is a joy... CherokeeDem Apr 2012 #9

What's wrong with "she said", and making the dialogue do the work? mainer Apr 2012 #10

Keep working Odessa123 May 2012 #11

I have what might sound like a silly question. nolabear May 2012 #12

Don't stop!!! Keep writing. I think you just have too much "who cares?" stuff in there. valerief May 2012 #13

It's hard to improve on what the others have already said. SheilaT May 2012 #14

Don't worry about editing before you finish the story. Baitball Blogger Jul 2012 #15