Will you read this and tell me what you think?

[YellowRubberDuckie]

I never share my poetry...but I decided to go ahead and share this. Please let me know what you think, and if you have questions, please ask.

What You Make It
By Duckie

Some days she cries
And she doesn’t know why.
The pain haunts her through the walls
Some days her head is so full, sleep is a dream.

She has love in her life, but it is not her family
“Family is what you make it,” she says,
But she still longs for the love of a sister she lost long ago.
She holds on the memories of the love of a father
Lost one winter day,
Sad she doesn’t have him to hold onto in the rain.

But there is a boy that is the sun
He loves her no matter what she has done
The days she can’t hold him are days of gray
The days she can are summer days with too much heat.

“Life is what you make it,” she says as she puts on her shades,
She starts her car, loaded down with hope,
Leaving the home that was always just a house since one winter day,
Smiling she leaves and has thoughts of never returning.
She feels free
Because tomorrow is bright, the pain yesterday a dream
“Love is what you make it,” she says and she smiles
She lays down to dream, her head full of sleep.

[SPKrazy]

1. Family and love are what you make it, as is life!

I like it duckie


:hug:

[YellowRubberDuckie]

2. Thanks.

[fizzgig]

3. there is a lot of wanting

but i see a lot of strength as well

thanks for sharing duckie

[YellowRubberDuckie]

5. You're welcome.

[ThomCat]

4. Hmmm... I think this would make a better story than poem.

There's obviously a lot behind this, but it doesn't all come out in a short poem.

[YellowRubberDuckie]

6. I don't know if I have enough memory on my computer to make it into a story.

LOL
I'm not good at stories. I can never end them.
Duckie