The RetroLounge Daily Poem Thread (Wed 4/30/2008)

[RetroLounge]

The Argument

After the argument, all things were strange.
They stood divided by their eloquence
Which had surprised them after so much silence.
Now there were real things to rearrange.
Words betokened deeds, but they were both
Lightened briefly, and they were inclined
To be kind as sometimes strangers can be kind.
It was as if, out of the undergrowth,
They stepped into a clearing and the sun,
Machetes still in hand. Something was done,
But how they did not fully realize.
Something was beginning. Something would stem
And branch from this one moment. Something made
Them both look up into each other's eyes
Because they both were suddenly afraid
And there was no one now to comfort them.

A.E. Stallings

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:hi:

RL

[Inchworm]

1. Youch!

How real.

:thumbsup:

[RetroLounge]

7. ...

:hi:

RL

[xchrom]

2. ...

It was as if, out of the undergrowth,
They stepped into a clearing and the sun,
Machetes still in hand. Something was done,
But how they did not fully realize.

[RetroLounge]

8. Hey

:hi:

RL

[BarenakedLady]

3. DAMN

:wow:

I can't even tell you...

[RetroLounge]

9. ...

:hug:

RL

[lizziegrace]

4. ...

x(

Describes it perfectly...

[RetroLounge]

10. yes...

:hi:

RL

[hisownpetard]

5. Intense little poem. Very well crafted in a subtle way. Interesting rhyme scheme:

A
B
B
A

C
D
D
C

E
E

F
G
H
F

[RetroLounge]

11. A little inversion of the Sonnet?

:hi:

RL

[BlueIris]

6. Ooooh, sneaky.

In a compelling way, of course.

[RetroLounge]

12. of course...

:rofl:

:hi:

RL

[CaliforniaPeggy]

13. My dear Retro...

Wow...

A poem as universal truth...

...Something was done,
But how they did not fully realize.
Something was beginning. Something would stem
And branch from this one moment...

Thank you...

:hi:

[RetroLounge]

14. you're welcome

:hi:

RL