I know how this sounds to some,

[AteAlien]

but I wrote this this morning, and need some feedback. Is it too...whatever words you may want to describe it as? It poured out of me this morning, and I am wanting to say these words at the waterfall wedding. Yes, again, I know how this sounds, but ask for your indulgence and input. Thanks all!

Promises I could make to you:
>
> I will, without question or doubt, always love you deeply and
> completely for who you are. You are a unique, beautiful and
> precious person who I have wanted to share life with since the
> first moment my eyes found yours and imagined a lifetime of
> possibilities. You are an angel walking this planet, and deserve to
> be loved without limit; my promise to you.
>
> I will, without question or doubt, forever remain in love with you,
> with all the consequences that entails. Consequences that include
> always treating you with kindness, respect and devotion, and
> keeping the desire for your happiness always at the forefront of my
> thoughts; my promise to you.
>
> When threats of trouble between us appear, I will attempt with all
> that is within me to extinguish them. I will work tirelessly to
> find whatever solution exists to assure your continued happiness;
> my promise to you.
>
> I will always remain open and honest with you, and hope for your
> understanding that my being human means that at times I will fall
> short of your expectations, but please know that I will always
> strive to meet whatever hopes you may have for me; my promise to
> you.
>
> I will take what thoughts and emotions you choose to share with me
> each day, and treat them as treasures to be remembered and
> reflected upon - bringing strength and intensifying my love for
> you; my promise to you.
>
> I will share in and enjoy what activities you wish to engage in
> together, when we are alone or with family, and will always treat
> your family with respect; my promise to you.
>
> When you feel a need for solitude I will not interfere, and when
> you feel a need for sharing I will always be there for you; my
> promise to you.
>
> My love for you will never diminish, disappear or dissipate; my
> promise to you.
>
> I love you always, Tracy; my promise to you.
>
> With loving thoughts,

[CaliforniaPeggy]

1. My dear AteAlien...

This is beautiful, but perhaps a bit long...

Since you just wrote it, I would suggest putting it away for a day or two, and then revisit it...

I do the same thing: I tend to verbally go on for longer than necessary...

And then when I go back and re-read, I find I can say it much more elegantly with fewer words...

I'm sure your bride will be overwhelmed with your love, no matter how you say it!

:hug:

[AteAlien]

2. thank you for your input!

I will revisit it.

thanks again



:hug: to you!

[crimsonblue]

3. I must but disagree, CP.

Personally, I like to think that no words can capture the love I have for my fiancée, and I do my best to get them out there, no matter how many words it may take. The important thing is that this is obviously from deep within the heart. The only person you should be thinking about when writing this is her, so make it as intimate as possible. Assuming these are your nuptials, treat them like she is the only person that will ever hear these words... like it is an intimate moment shared in bed or a lazy sunday spent at the park. Can love be verbose? Yeah, but there's nothing wrong with that. It is amazing that you are capable of expressing so much emotion and contentment. Best wishes to you and your lovely bride.

[AteAlien]

4. the only person that will hear these words

and the intimate moments.

thank you!

I may try to not be so verbose, but will likely expand what I want to say. I may be unable to stop it from happening.

Best of luck for you and your fiancee!

[Bunny]

5. Oaky, I'm a crotchety old turd, so keep that in mind.

But you *did* ask, so here goes: the sentiment is nice, but the intentions are not realistic. I suggest you focus not so much on sacrificing everything about yourself to ensure her eternal happiness, which you cannot do in any case, but try to find the words to indicate that you'll do everything in your power to forge a true partnership with her. Promise that you'll stand by her through thick and thin, that you'll face life's problems as a team, that you'll always have her back, etc. Let her know that she's the best thing that ever happened to you, and that you intend to do your best to make her feel the same. But do it as her equal - promising to gratefully accept whatever little bones she chooses to throw you is a little, well, needy.

Okay, now that I've deposited a turd in the punchbowl, I'll back off. You sound like a very sweet guy, I'm happy for you and I wish you well in your married life. :hi:

[AteAlien]

6. I do understand what you are saying

and much, if not most, is right on target, but I do feel the need to express my devotion at what I hope to be a special time. I will try to trim the needy parts, and add some more sharing parts.

I really do appreciate your thoughts!

thank you.

:hi:

[Bunny]

8. You are welcome! Seeing a dude so deeply in love is actually a pretty cool thing.

:thumbsup:

[Rabrrrrrr]

7. I find it unrealistic and so overwrought that it loses its sentiment and borders on scary.

The sentiment is wonderful in many ways, but too much "always" and "never" and overdoneness. Sounds like something one might say to an overly selfish, violent, and unstable dictator tyrant. It's all stuff you will do for her, but nothing about partnership, nothing about stuff you will just do, nothing about what you will expect from her...

But as I said, the sentiment is wonderful - it's just wrapped very poorly in terms that are very much the terms of a totally dependent person.

For instance - > When you feel a need for solitude I will not interfere, and when you feel a need for sharing I will always be there for you; my promise to you.

So, she can go off and be alone whenever she wants, but you will be ready, at any moment, to drop whatever you are doing - and make sure you are immediately available - and fulfill her needs. You do say "always" here, so that's a hell of a promise to live up to. What about your needs? What about if you need to be alone? What about if her needs are ridiculous?

[AteAlien]

9. well...

The sentiment is wonderful in many ways, but too much "always" and "never" and overdoneness.

I've already felt in love with her for over a third of my lifetime, and have been through some things, but you do have a potential point if she doesn't feel similarly.

Sounds like something one might say to an overly selfish, violent, and unstable dictator tyrant. It's all stuff you will do for her, but nothing about partnership, nothing about stuff you will just do, nothing about what you will expect from her...

I was hoping for a positive response from her that shared her thoughts individually and in partnership. You are right about that - as I wrote before, I do need to add more sharing, though I don't want to add any expectations.

But as I said, the sentiment is wonderful - it's just wrapped very poorly in terms that are very much the terms of a totally dependent person.

Not dependent in any way other than expressing a devotion to emotions. I may have to review.

For instance - > When you feel a need for solitude I will not interfere, and when you feel a need for sharing I will always be there for you; my promise to you.

So, she can go off and be alone whenever she wants, but you will be ready, at any moment, to drop whatever you are doing - and make sure you are immediately available - and fulfill her needs.

Well, I will drop whatever I am doing to fulfill her needs, and she can go off to be alone whenever she wants - I don't control her!

You do say "always" here, so that's a hell of a promise to live up to. What about your needs?

I've been through enough to know that my needs will be fulfilled as her - and our - needs are fulfilled.

What about if you need to be alone?

Then I will hope that this is a part of her understanding.

What about if her needs are ridiculous?

They aren't, and won't be.

I do thank you for your thoughts. Very thought provoking.