My poem from the open mic tonight: "Hunger"

[CaliforniaPeggy]

The sperm into the egg
The seed roots
Down in the dirt
And the water, and the sun and
The plow work the land

We are hungry
Our hunger creates us

The baby at the breast
Drinks his mother’s love
These will take his hunger
And he will live

Hunger for love
For life from dust

We reach
And need

Our mouths open
In our hunger

Our lips and our tongues
And our teeth
Taking in our life
Our strenuous life
Our passionate life
Where we have come
To live

Our cells combine and mingle
We live
Because we hunger

[NanceGreggs]

1. Wonderful ...

... as always.

:applause:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

3. My dear Nance ...

Ah, thank you, sweetie...

I'm having so damn much fun with this!

:hug:

[OhioChick]

2. You're quite talented.

:) :applause:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

4. My dear OhioChick!

Well, what can I say?

But thank you, of course...

Glad you enjoyed this!

:)

[seaker]

5. Oh...you made me shiver

[CaliforniaPeggy]

6. My dear seaker...

I hope it was a good shiver...

Thanks for coming by tonight!

:hug:

[redqueen]

7. This deserves to be seen by more than just the late-night crowd I think.

Love it, Peggy. Especially the end there. Lovely. :)

[CaliforniaPeggy]

9. My dear redqueen...

I thank you!

I was actually getting ready to kick this one myself...

I'm really happy that you enjoyed this one! It was some time in the making, and I'm really happy with it...

:hug:

[ashling]

8. Wonderful!

:hi:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

10. Ah, thank you so much, my dear ashling!

:hi:

[Lionel Mandrake]

11. Very nice.

The split between lines 4 and 5 seems peculiar. I would have expected either "sun/and" or "plow/work". But this is a nit.

I like the poem. "We live/Because we hunger" is fresh and original.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

12. My dear Lionel Mandrake!

I appreciate your criticism...

That's how those lines felt right to me...

So that's how I wrote them down...


Glad you like the poem, overall!

Thanks, sweetie!

:hug:

[Pool Hall Ace]

13. Hunger is something we all have in common

but some of us prosper and some of us suffer. Thank you for the poem! :)

[CaliforniaPeggy]

14. My dear Pool Hall Ace!

Yes indeed...

Thank you, sweetie!

:hug:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

15. Thanks to whoever gave the recs!

I greatly appreciate them...

;)

[suninvited]

16. wow, peggy

that's haunting

[CaliforniaPeggy]

17. My dear suninvited!

I'm so glad you think so!

Thank you...

I had so much fun writing it!

:hug:

[elshiva]

18. Awesome. Erotic and lovely.

:hug: :hug:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

19. My dear elshiva!

I thank you so much, sweetie!

:hug:

[elshiva]

20. You are welcome! Thank you for sharing your poetry.

:hug: :hug: I lurve you. :loveya:

[NYC_SKP]

21. Oh, peggy!

The poem speaks to me of things timeless and universal.
And of commonalities among all people, indeed among all living things.

A real classic!

Wish I'd been there but thanks for bringing it here!

:hug:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

22. My dear NYC_SKP!

I've been trying to write this one for a long time...

I was full of inchoate ideas, unformed, vague, hard to put my finger on.

And then a few days ago, I just sat down, and decided that now was the time.

Thank you so much for your incisive comments, sweetie!

The crowd at the open mic loved it!


:hug:

[NYC_SKP]

29. It's beautiful!

I read things into your poem, a little biology, a little psychology.
I saw the story of living things and human hearts within it.

I might have written more but typed that out last night on my iPhone in a hospital room while my dad and I waited for a bed to become available. He's suffering from dementia and has to be watched 24/7. Mom and I can't handle what his behaviors have become in just one week.

I looked down at him, with his child-like behaviors, and saw how your poem applies even to him.

From infancy to our dying days we hunger, we seek.

Nourishment.

Recognition.

Dignity.

Respect.

:hug:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

30. Oh, sweetie...

I am so sorry about your dad...How terrible for all of you.

Your answer last night was so perfect that I had no idea you were in the situation you were...

And you allowed me to impose on you...

Thank you for everything you've said.

I truly appreciate it all...

:hug:

[NYC_SKP]

38. Oh heaven's no...

No imposition at all.

In fact, reading your poem made me reflect on my dad lying there.

You made a difference, I felt more compassionate for him, I looked at him differently because of your poem.

That, dear Peggy, is the power of your words.

:toast:

He is a bit better today, more lucid, and has been officially diagnosed with dementia, a form that, for now, may come and go unexpectedly.

He might recover and come home, they are going to try some new meds.

Thank you. :hug:

[av8rdave]

23. Wow....that connects so many thoughts!

Nice job!

[CaliforniaPeggy]

24. My dear av8rdave!

There are a few connections, aren't there?

It's just how it came out of me...

Thanks, sweetie...

:hug:

[bluesbassman]

25. Well done Peggy!

You have captured one of life's pimary drives in a most cyclic fashion. Bravo.:applause:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

27. My dear bluesbassman!

Ah, thank you!

The words just show up, and I'm lucky enough to hear them...

:hug:

[PBS Poll-435]

26. Fantastic

:applause:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

28. My dear PBS Poll-435!

Thank you!

I appreciate it...

:hug:

[MissMillie]

31. you're so eloquent

and sensual....



(:( and all I can do is write about food....)

[CaliforniaPeggy]

33. My dear MissMillie!

Aw...

You know, I've been writing for several years now, and this stuff doesn't show up fully formed, and ready for publication!

I love your food writings!

It all fits together, and it all works, sweetie...

Thank you for your compliments...:hug:

[trof]

32. You're making me hungry.

:-)
Nice poem, BTW.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

34. My dear trof!

LOL!

Well, go eat something, then, silly!

Thanks...

:rofl:

;)

[trof]

37. Ah...but food is not all I hunger for.

I too hunger for affection and companionship.
But not really.
I have plenty of both.
;-)

[Tommy_Carcetti]

35. My dear California Peggy....

...you are quite a talent. Please feel free to post any more of your work here with your friends at the DU Lounge any day.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

36. My dear Tommy_Carcetti!

Wow, thank you...

And I do post my work from time to time here...

When I think it's good enough.

I normally put these in my Journal...

Have a look, if you wish...

I appreciate your kindness...

:hug: