A Recent Poem

[CaliforniaPeggy]

“The Scent of You”

There are roses in your mouth
Champagne in your eyes
And the scent of vanilla
Trails from your fingertips

You have left a mark on me
A lovely scented mark
And as my hair
Whirls round my head
I can taste you.

Let us make our bed together
And in the fruitful sheets
We’ll lie
Dreaming of tomorrow
And our raspberry fruited sky

Your kisses are like ice cream
Cold and sweet and sharp

Your hands pierce me like
rosebush thorns
drifting o’er my heart.

Bring your scent to me, love
And I will take it in
We will be united
Fragrant under the skin.....



© MLC

[CaliforniaPeggy]

1. Over 200 views, one recommendation, and zero comments?

WTF?

:wtf:

[Vanje]

10. Clearly

Your genius is misunderstood.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

11. Hardly!

I am no genius...

And you are kidding me.

[bluesbassman]

2. Hey Peggy, just saw it.

Nice imagery, makes me hungry if you know what I mean.:evilgrin:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

3. My dear bluesbassman!

Ah I hear you!

And indeed I know what you mean...O8)

I'm not sure why I went with these words...but I did. It was fun, too!

Thanks, sweetie...:hug:

[RandomThoughts]

4. Some of your choices of words can have a bad interpretation

with people of certain beliefs. Specifically the part about a mark.



However, you would have to intend it as they interpret it for it to be real, requirements of free will and all. And I do not interpret your intent as the bad interpretation.

The word Seal is much better choice to use in that poem.

Revelations 7

1After this I saw four angels standing at the four corners of the earth, holding back the four winds of the earth to prevent any wind from blowing on the land or on the sea or on any tree. 2Then I saw another angel coming up from the east, having the seal of the living God. He called out in a loud voice to the four angels who had been given power to harm the land and the sea: 3"Do not harm the land or the sea or the trees until we put a seal on the foreheads of the servants of our God." 4Then I heard the number of those who were sealed: 144,000 from all the tribes of Israel.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

5. That is an interesting interpretation; one I had not thought of.

But I see what you mean.

And I certainly did not mean the bad interpretation! I don't go down that road.

So you think that stanza should read like this:

You have left a seal on me
A lovely scented seal
And as my hair
Whirls round my head
I can taste you.

I'm not sure about the second use of the word "seal."

Still, I appreciate your contribution.

Thank you!

[RandomThoughts]

8. I am saying it should not say mark

but to say seal along with the 'I' pronoun might be a bit unhumble, or making a strong claim within same interpretation.

Its your poem, your choice, but the mark is a really bad part of that poem, as many would interpret it.

To clarify my comment for those of same belief as me
Note: When I say mark requires the knowledge of what it means. It does not need the knowledge of what the final outcome of one that took a mark would mean, Revelations says a third of the elect will be deceived. But it does require the free will choice to take the mark from evil, when it is in a form falsely claiming to be a God, which was not the intent of your poem.

My beliefs and how I worship is to worship God Almighty, the one and only God, through Jesus Christ his son, who died and rose again to give us salvation. I do not worship, nor follow, any false Gods or men or women that falsely claim to be Gods. And on that is the hope and love that sustains me.

And to be even more clear, I should repeat that I am a sinner, saved by the grace of God, not by anything I could or have done. I am also in no way special, for all glory goes to God Almighty through our Lord and Savior Jesus Christ.

[RandomThoughts]

9. I know I am talking alot about my beliefs in this thread

but for those of the same belief of me it is a pretty serious subject.

One of the ways evil tries to break someones faith is to make them think they are damned. This is done many ways, and sometimes is even supported by people of faith, for no one is all good or all bad. And even good people can add things that might shake someones faith.

The overwhelming message of Jesus is that he came to save the world not condemn it, so be wary of tricks to try and make you feel condemned. But also be aware of bad paths.

I know many believe different things, but in my belief Jesus is the son of God, and he rose from death, and is still alive today, for our salvation.

[bluedawg12]

15. It didn't seem like Peggy was referring to The Mark of the Beast

in her poem.

It was the mark, or lasting impression of her lover as referred to in that lovely, sensual poem.

Certainly, the word "mark" is not synonymous with The Beast.

Anything can leave a mark. It's not like she wrote, "You left your 666, on me."

[CaliforniaPeggy]

16. My dear bluedawg12...

You are absolutely right...

But he thought that was the interpretation that some folks would have...

I appreciate your very kind remarks!

Thank you for this clarification...

:hug:

[bluedawg12]

17. You're welcome. I guess that is a sign of a good poem, it is evocative.

It brings emotions to the surface and of course it is subject to personal interpretation.

Still, I think that the poet's intent and theme is usually pretty clear, as in this case.

I guess one never knows what emotions creative efforts will bring out in others, that seems to be the beauty and the sorrow of creativity. Once released a personal work becomes public and others are free to see it from their own perspective.

Keep up the good work. :)

[CaliforniaPeggy]

20. I continue to write, often daily...

It has become a consuming passion for me...

And of course, you are correct: Once something is released, it becomes public and subject to how others see it...

And that's part of the thrill. To see what it means to others, to see how it affects them...

I love that!

:hug:

[bluedawg12]

24. They say the best writers have a discipline of writing daily to hone

their craft.

There is something emotionally liberating about about being able to capture one's own experiences and translate them into an art form.

I don't think poetry is given enough value in society today. On the other hand, perhaps our modern poets just set it to a more contemporary medium, like music lyrics and rap?

[CaliforniaPeggy]

28. I agree that poetry doesn't have much value today...

But somehow I don't think of rap as poetic! Music lyrics, maybe. But I've taken to listening very carefully to lyrics (when I can understand them, lol!) and often they're banal or uninspired. The music is what's important in those songs.

And then there are the songs that make your heart sing with their inspired lyrics. So, it's hard to say...

Most people think of poetry as something for sissies, and that's an image that needs to be changed.

[RandomThoughts]

25. I know, and you are right it is a thin link

but because of the OP lost the muse, I wanted to post what I posted. Was not intended as a slight on her, just something I thought would be better to comment on.

[Vanje]

19. You thought this was about mark-o-the beast (TM)?

Thats just nutty.

[RandomThoughts]

27. No I did not,

But I know there are people that would think that. I said that I did not see that as the intent.

[bluedawg12]

34. I'll wait till I hear from people who do think that and see their connection

between the word "mark" meaning a stamp, or imprint, and the specific use of that word in context to mean, "the mark of the Beast."

I don't see that the poem would have been better by not using that word and makes little sense by using the word "seal" instead.

You have left a seal on me
A lovely scented seal
And as my hair
Whirls round my head
I can taste you.

Oxford Dictionary:
mark1 >noun 1 a small area on a surface having a different color from its surroundings. 2 something that indicates position or acts as a pointer. 3 a line, figure, or symbol made to identify or record something. 4 a sign or indication of a quality or feeling. 5 a characteristic feature or property of something. 6 a level or stage. 7 a point awarded for a correct answer or for proficiency in an examination. 8 a particular model or type of a vehicle or machine. >verb 1 make a mark on. 2 write a word or symbol on (an object) in order to identify it. 3 indicate the position of. 4 (mark out) distinguish or delineate. 5 indicate or acknowledge (a significant event). 6 (mark up or down) increase or reduce the indicated price of (an item). 7 assess and give a mark to (written work). 8 notice or pay careful attention to. 9 Brit. (in team games) stay close to (an opponent) in order to prevent them getting or passing the ball.
-PHRASES be quick off the mark be fast in responding. make a mark have a lasting or significant effect. mark time 1 (of troops) march on the spot without moving forward. 2 engage temporarily in routine activities. near (or close) to the mark almost accurate. off (or wide of) the mark incorrect or inaccurate. on the mark correct; accurate. on your marks be ready to start (used to instruct competitors in a race). up to the mark up to the required standard or normal level.
-ORIGIN Old English.

.........

Why would lovers leave a seal on each other? Unless they were seals to start with?

[jeff30997]

43. "Why would lovers leave a seal on each other?"

Lol.Get this: In French the word for seal (the animal) is phoque and it's pronounced

exactly like fuck.

So now it gives:

You have left a fuck on me
A lovely scented fuck
And as my hair
Whirls round my head
I can taste you.

Whoa! Now I'm off to bed. :hide:

[NanceGreggs]

6. Just this instant ...

.... I suddenly understood.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

7. Ah, my dear Nance!

I'm so glad you do...

It means so much, coming from you...

:hug:

[Strong Atheist]

12. K&R. nt.

[BlueIris]

13. Nice work. nt

[CaliforniaPeggy]

14. Thanks!

I'm trying out new ideas...

[arcadian]

18. When this is put to music, how will it sound when Susan Boyle sings it?

:rofl::hug:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

21. My dear arcadian!

This is not meant to be sung, silly!

And I suspect she could sing the phone book, or the dictionary, and make them sound brilliant!

:P

:hug:

[cwydro]

33. Oh no you di'nt

Not in Peggy's thread!

[Xipe Totec]

22. Sonnet to my mother

If I've not returned, it's not because I've forgotten
your scent of thyme and kitchen
they say you can see more clearly from afar
and it's not the same to walk than to wander.

I have learned that love has green eyes
and a deck of cards has four suits
that what is lost never returns
and the tide rises and then falls.

And I learned that simple is not the same as stupid
and price and value are not the same
and any dish can be a feast
when the horizon is light and the road is a kiss

If I've not returned, it's not because I've forgotten
It's only because I've lost the way home,
Mama.


- Joan Manuel Serrat

[CaliforniaPeggy]

23. My dear Xipe Totec...

This is a lovely sonnet! I'm not sure I understand why you posted it here, but still...

Thank you for this beauty.

Did you like my work?

:pals:

[Xipe Totec]

26. I loved it

And the references to scents and memory reminded me of Serrat's work.

It is a compliment.

:hi:

PS: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tgHtlIMXf5I

[CaliforniaPeggy]

29. What a lovely song...

Thank you for the link...

I'm so glad you like my little poem!

Thank you, sweetie...

:hug:

[Xipe Totec]

30. Champagne in your eyes...

reminded me of the gold sparkles in green eyes...

[Prisoner_Number_Six]

31. As I told you before, Omar Khayyam has nothing on you.

Your focus is becoming both clearer and sharper each day.

A jug of wine, a loaf of bread, and thou...

[CaliforniaPeggy]

32. My dear Prisoner_Number_Six...

Wow, sweetie...

Comparing me to Omar Khayyam?

What can I say but.....Thank you.

I am extremely touched by your very kind remarks...

You are the wind beneath my wings...

:loveya:

:hug:

[applegrove]

35. So evocative Peggy. I want to smell something now.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

38. My dear applegrove!

It made me hungry!

Glad you enjoyed it...

:hug:

36. hi new here

Nice poem its very nice;)

[CaliforniaPeggy]

39. My dear hannahbana!

Yes, I know you're new!

Welcome to DU, sweetie...

Glad you enjoyed my poem...:hug:

[Amerigo Vespucci]

37. I had an ex girfriend whose scent was like a fragrant balogna sandwich on white bread

She'd come over to my house after working out at the gym, without showering, and as we sat on the sofa I'd think to myself "the air is somehow reminiscent of a fragrant balogna sandwich on white bread." She left a mark on me too, but not in the way that you'd think.

:toast:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

40. My dear Amerigo Vespucci!

Somehow I think I know why she's not your girlfriend any more...

Thanks for playing!

:toast:

[seaker]

41. Oh...gracious me

Yum...
Thank you very much.

[CaliforniaPeggy]

42. My dear seaker!

It was entirely my pleasure...

You're welcome, sweetie!

:hi:

[6000eliot]

44. Somebody's hungry, or horny

or both!

[CaliforniaPeggy]

45. My dear 6000eliot!

Always...;)

[redqueen]

46. *sigh*

:)

[CaliforniaPeggy]

49. Thank you, my dear redqueen...

;)

[BeachBaby]

47. HO. LEE.

I have to turn on my ceiling fan.

:thumbsup:

[CaliforniaPeggy]

50. My dear BeachBaby!

I'm glad!

Thank you, sweetie...

:hug:

[RFKHumphreyObama]

48. That's beautiful, magical, seductive imagery CP

You truly do have a way with words. But that was always obvious

[CaliforniaPeggy]

51. My dear RFKHumphreyObama!

My goodness, thank you!

Your eloquent praise takes my breath away...

:hug: