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XemaSab Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Wed Aug-18-10 03:07 AM
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Dust to Dust--A Poem
Downstairs in the unused basement
Those ancient timbers creak and moan
Cold seeps in through the moldering casement
And that empty space is dry as bone.

In unused corners the cobweb gathers
Dust gets thicker every year
Under the bare bulb the light scatters
Every day brings winter near.

On an old shelf stands a rusty pail
Used to hold milks and creams
It's empty now, used and frail
Cracked and worn it no longer gleams.

Once the children frolicked in the shadows
But their unwelcome footsteps no longer fall
All that's left are boarded up windows
And the spiders rule over all.
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TheManInTheMac Donating Member (512 posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Wed Aug-18-10 06:00 AM
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1. Lovely...
and very evocative. I can actually smell the stale, musty air.
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CocaNova Donating Member (40 posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Wed Aug-18-10 06:08 AM
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2. That poem is really great !
Edited on Wed Aug-18-10 06:17 AM by CocaNova
And very scary too ! :scared:
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Tommy_Carcetti Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Wed Aug-18-10 06:14 AM
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3. Intense, intense imagery.
That type of wordsmithing can only lead me to one conclusion.

You're Canadian.
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TZ Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Wed Aug-18-10 08:05 AM
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4. ChuggoSab!
:)
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XemaSab Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Wed Aug-18-10 05:08 PM
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6. DTM
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motely36 Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Wed Aug-18-10 08:35 AM
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5. wow! very visual!
Not sure if that's a good thing!
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Demoiselle Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Wed Aug-18-10 05:48 PM
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7. Oh my. Wonderful images...
I've spent the day cleaning my basement.
Would that my cellar were such a romantic ruin. (It's just peeyucky!)
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